Skip to main content
G11 SUPER GIO
123
03
CHALLENGE MISSIONthesis, organization, evidence, and style

thesis, organization, evidence, and style

INDEPENDENT DEFENSEINDEPENDENT TRANSFER

Revise for precision

Draft conclusion: "La tecnología siempre destruye la conversación." Evidence in the essay shows phones interrupted 38% of observed meals but also enabled distant relatives to join 12% of gatherings.

  1. Remove the absolute.
  2. Represent both disruption and connection.
  3. Return to a conditional claim.

Which revision is strongest?

MODELArgument Draft Portfolio
SAY
PROVEChoose with evidence
CLUE

Pause. Find what matters. Then make your move.